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If Only

If Only

 

If I could only

Only what you ask

If I could only imagine

Imagine what, the pain you feel

The love you feel

If’s so many ifs in life

 

If I could only share

Share what you wonder

Share the intellect you have

The peace I know

Respect I have and love I know

If only, if only I could

Then something good could happen

 

If only I could wash away your fears

And keep you happy

If only I could answer your calls

If only I could hold you like a lover should

If only, if only,

If only I could

Comments


  • 5 years ago

    wolf_child14

    A very, very good poem

  • 5 years ago

    Madison12345

    The poem is sweet. Just a couple suggestions: do not be afraid to use puntuations other than commas. When you say "Only what you ask," It gets confusing. Don't forget you can use exclamation points, question marks, periods, and commas in the middle of lines. So try "If only what, you ask" and "Imagine what, the pain you feel?" And when you are rhyming, try a period every 4 rhymes. These are just suggestions to make your poems look and sound better and be a bit less confusing. These are simply suggestions and you by no means have to take my advice.

  • 5 years ago

    RedSoxpawn

    Thank you duch

  • 5 years ago

    duchess2000

    Very insightful leftySmile

  • 5 years ago

    CupcakewithSprinkles

    kk

  • 5 years ago

    RedSoxpawn

    I made the comment about keep watching for updates to everybody, it's sortof like a public notice

  • 5 years ago

    CupcakewithSprinkles

    I don't get it , what do you mean?

  • 5 years ago

    RedSoxpawn

    that wasn't just to you

  • 5 years ago

    CupcakewithSprinkles

    ok I will

  • 5 years ago

    RedSoxpawn

    thanks, it's a work in progress keep checkin on it every now and then

  • 5 years ago

    CupcakewithSprinkles

    more awesomer !!

  • 5 years ago

    RedSoxpawn

    thank you ccws

  • 5 years ago

    CupcakewithSprinkles

    its awesome ^^

  • 5 years ago

    RedSoxpawn

    thanks mandy

  • 5 years ago

    brownielover994

    nice poem red, i like it! =)

  • 5 years ago

    RedSoxpawn

    yeah

  • 5 years ago

    Heejo

    this feels as if it's about cc, but yet.. nevermind its awesome

  • 5 years ago

    FIRE_FOR_EFFECT

    lol, welcome to my world, where poetry has unknown meanings

  • 5 years ago

    RedSoxpawn

    wow three comments in less minutes. I'm not sure if it's about cc or not, really It just sortof came out of nowhere. thanks donna. And bad, good could mean anything that applies to what the person reading wants

  • 5 years ago

    Heejo

    very nice, and a great meaning to it your getting a 9,9/10 haha

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