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sodnomjamts

every day one women.... not too much hard?

suezy

sodnomjamts the author only wants to be known as AJC

suezy

ciljettu , thank you it is a lovely poem Smile

suezy

Redbull we have a hard time in convincing you dont we lol

xtophr1

I was the same as RedBull for my whole life... Until I was 42 and fell in love for the first time. No one was more surprised than I. Then I walked into a WalMart in Whitehorse YT and saw this piece of rinky-dink art that said, "There is only one happiness in life. To love and to be loved." Ordinarily I would have walked right by and maybe not even notice. But I was arrested by it and posed near it for a pic that I sent to my sweet baby...

suezy

That is so sweet xtophr1:)

khaled_sma1

Beautiful words

suezy

Thanks Khaled :)

RumbleTumble

sodnomjamts

thanks suezy,  you are the author aren`t you?

suezy

No I'm not ,I just delivered for the author:)

UnicornMan

AJC is the credit at the end of the poem. Beyond that we don't know who it was who wrote the poem, although some internet searching could find something.

sodnomjamts

it looks version like from Bible?

VULPES_VULPES

Does nobody notice the word choice error in the first line?

"Theirs a something we just can't fight"?

Otherwise, it's a well-written poem.

suezy

You are correct very observant Smile

elCaballeroBRK

I like the poem

suezy

thanks! Smile

TheKirkster

A nice poem. :-)

suezy

Thanks Matt Smile

xtophr1

I've overlooked the errors. But "Theirs" should be "there's" and "Cause' " should be " 'cause". There are other relaxed, trendy selections that are entirely subjective. I would write it differently, as I'm sure you would, so the rest is just nit-picking critique.