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So it’s seems like @LegendarySpartan is the only member sharing poems. It gets rather boring when only one person writes all the poems. The poem below is a Sonnet (CDCD EFEF GG). I wrote it quickly, so there’s always room for suggestions. 
So.....here’s the poem I wrote: 

I look up into the night sky,

Admiring how each star shines.

Gazing and gazing, until I begin to cry,

So much wonders fill my mind.

The Milky Way adorns the sky,

Shooting stars flickers by.

I hope the sun will never rise,

But I know that won’t happen any time.

Gazing into the sky I wonder why

My loved one had to die.

Edit: 

I look up into the night sky,

Admiring how each star shines.

Gazing and gazing, until tears roll down my eyes,

So much wonders fill my mind.

The Milky Way adorns the skies,

The harsh wind sends chills down my spine.

I hope the sun will never rise,

But I know that won’t happen any time.

Looking up into the sky, I wonder why

My loved one had to die.

Oof, no one’s interested....

Because no one saw it yet😁 It's amazing 😍 очень 🔥✨

Find a way to rhyme rise with time, maybe? Because sonnets have to rhyme (which is why I hardly write sonnets)👀👀👀

That’s true. “Time” doesn’t rly rhyme with “by”. I’m not sure why I didn’t see that. 

Perhaps “Shooting stars flicker and fly”? Sound strange though. Let me think 🤔 

Hmmm... If you're following that pattern of rhyming, then you need to somehow make sure that "sky" rhymes with "rise" as well✨✨✨

I convinced myself that they rhymed, lol. 
[Brainstorming...]

Or maybe I should change line 8 into “But I know I’ll have to say goodbye”.

And maybe line 5 into “The Milky Way soothes my eyes”. Again, it sounds strange though....

I look up into the night sky,

Admiring how each star shines.

Gazing and gazing, until I begin to cry,

So much wonders fill my mind.

The Milky Way adorns the sky,

Shooting stars flickers by.

I hope the sun will never rise,

But I know that I’ll have to say goodbye.

Gazing into the sky I wonder why

My loved one had to die.

Well, I’ll think about it later. Gtg. 
If anyone else has any suggestions, feel free to share=)

WOW 😍🤩🤯

Great! Now I'm thinking about posting one of my poems lol... Hmm should I?

Feel free to do so in the Scribe Room!! All scribes (I mean members) are welcome to do so😄

There are some things that you missed here Acenath 😈

Thank you=)

Acenath?

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Yes, Acenath was my name before I performed my deed poll and changed my name to my current one (Acenath is short for Acenate-nefer-hamunaptra)