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I like your story so far. Good concept. However, it will need some good illustrations to make your characters very child friendly and believable. So have you thought about doing the pen and ink drawings yourself, or will you need some collaboration on that? Illustrations will make or break a childrens' book, as you might imagine. The illustrations are part of what the publisher will or will not like as part and parcel of the story. You could do the drawings (be sure to photocopy them) and add watercolors yourself. Even if you are not doing the illustrations you will still need to make some sketches of your own to point the way, and also he help you analyze and visualize the story in a better way for yourself. You might try sketching out the ending to help make sure you have the right ending to the story. There might be a moral to the ending.
Ah! You did post a sample. Excellent. 
Okay, I won't say much, since I'm not a children's author, but there are a couple general things I can point out. First: you have an amusing (and I believe original) idea, and that gives you a big head start! Two: you've done a good job of giving the sense that they're in a hurry.
A couple negatives:
-Please do not, I repeat, DO NOT put dialogue from two different people in the same paragraph. It gets very confusing.
-You have some big time run-on sentences, but those should be easy to fix. I think the worst of the bunch is the opening line. You should probably break that into at least two, if not three sentences.
-You say their names a tremendous amount. Again, easy to fix. Just add in 'he's and 'she's when it isn't ambiguous.
Well, that's all I'll say for now! If you want more, I could be a little more detailed. Overall, good job! 
Oh, one more quick question. Is this a first draft?
Yes, something like that. Thanks you guys for the comments. You really need other people's opinions and their criticism to make your story the best it can be. I was trying for more like Argonauts story more adventure andaction but the world I was creating , i couldn't get it right and i didn't have the perfect stroyline.
Hi, guys do you think there is anymore stuff i can add into the storyline to make it more believable or fun/exciting for the reader.
And the title Gazonapede is that to hard to a kid to say, should I change the name it was actually my father who suggested that!
I can't really help you with whether or not to keep Gazonapede. I think it's kind of amusing, but this isn't my genre, so it's hard for me to say. It's up to you!
What age are you aiming for? If they're young kids, maybe you want shorter sentences? I don't know. Just a thought.
Okay, I'll give you an example of what I was talking about. I don't want to say too much or you'll start sounding exactly like me! And you want your own voice. 
I would write the first paragraph more like this:
Today was looking to be perfect. The sun shone and everything was peaceful. Baby birds soared in the wonderful sky, darting in and out of the fluffy white clouds, and a colourful sunrise bloomed on the horizon. But down below, at the bottom of the garden, Bugsville was busily preparing for an important event: The Garden Olympics!
What do you think?
That's excellent thanks
I was reading a book it said to avoid confusion - make sure the characters don't have names beginning with the same letter. So I probably have to replace Garry and Gabby's names if I keep Garry!
Hi, thanks for all you've said so I'm posting another sample of more.
Gavin the Gazonapede
Christmas in the Garden
When Garry and Gavin woke up to the trees around them outlined in white frost and their calendar saying it was Christmas Eve they were thrilled. As happy as ever they jumped up and got ready. Today they had to decorate the Bugville Christmas Tree an old, large tree that stood in the centre of the town square.
“Quick, not long left Garry!” Gavin the Gazonapede said crawling up the Christmas tree. It was beautiful, dressed with fairy lights and tinsel. It meant a lot to all the bugs in the city and every year everyone helped out putting decorations on it to make it beautiful for when Father Cricket came. You see that the bugs did not believe in a jolly fat Santa Claus, no they believed in Father Cricket – a wise, old cricket that made gifts for everyone. Each year he flew in a sleigh delivering the presents to all the bugs and insects across the world on the naughty or nice bug list.
“Give me a lift Gavin, I need to put the star on the top,” Garry said climbing the tree. “Wait just need to put on one more bit of tinsel.” Gavin replied spreading a long string of red tinsel around the tree. “It can’t wait; I’ll do it by myself.” Garry said crawling to the top of the tree. “No, just wait!” Gavin said following him. “Sorry!” Garry said putting the star loosely on the top of the tree. “It’s ok, Gavin. I did it!” Garry said climbing back down and jumping off. “Don’t jump off Garry, you’ll wreck the tree!” Gavin said carefully climbing down the trunk. “Calm down Gavin, relax sometimes it seems as though you’re my mother!” Garry said.
Just then a sudden blast of wind rocked the tree. They knew the tree couldn’t fall and everything would remain on the tree as long as everything was put on properly. “Hey Garry, did you put the star on properly?” Gavin asked watching the star shake. “Sure!” Garry said walking away. “We need to put out the cookies and carrots for Father Cricket and his magical reindeer bugs.” “No, wait look,” Gavin said pointing to the star wobbling unsteadily on the top. “I think it might fall,” Gavin said, “Quick, go up and get it Garry, I’ll catch it if it falls,” Gavin said. “Ok,” Garry said starting to climb the tree, when he got half way another blast of wind howled at the tree. Garry held on with all his might as fierce winds hit the tree, each time shaking the star on top more and more. That’s when it started to rail and snow, large drops of water and snow crystals fell from the sky. Garry dodging the rain and snow slowly managed to go higher and higher. But when he was nearly there another blast of wind had done it the star was now flying toward the ground. “Catch it Gavin!” Garry said as the bright star neared Gavin.
As Gavin reached out to catch it, some snow hit him in the face, he couldn’t see where was the star was. Was it still in the air? Or had it reached the ground? Gavin didn’t know he hadn’t heard a smash of shattering glass yet. He looked around, he saw it! It had landed on a patch of snow which had saved it. “Found it Garry it’s ok it’s not broken!” Gavin said walking closer to pick it up. “Ok, I’m coming down now!” Garry said sliding down the tree easily, as the rain, snow and wind had stopped. Closer, Gavin walked so close he bent down and reached out to pick it up. “SMASH!” Garry had landed on the star shattering it into a million glass pieces. Glass flew everywhere. Some went into the air to be carried away, some in the snow or some remained right in front of Gavin and Garry. The only source of hope in Bugsville was destroyed, since the drought had wiped out many sources of food and the sun toasted many bugs alive everyone was miserable. The star meant joy and love to everyone living in Bugsville.
Interesting, is this a metaphore for human relations?
Good! I love the Father Cricket thing! 
But... I'm not sure why the ending is so morbid. Any reason?
What do you mean morbid? What should I do?
nothing. your writing is good. exalt!
I'm just asking if you wanted to make it dark. It's your story, not mine.
I hope to become a children's writer one day, and am currently writing a series. I will provide a sample. I'd like your feedback such as tips, errors and things I could add to make it better. I am also looking for a better name as the current one Gazonapedes is probably too long and hard for kids to say.
Gavin the Gazonapede
Garden Olympics
Today was looking to be perfect the sun was shining and everything was peaceful, baby birds flew soaring above in the wonderful sky, darting in and out of the fluffy white clouds and on the horizon stood a colourful sunrise but down below at the bottom of the garden Bugsville was busy preparing for an important event. The Garden Olympics!
“Hey, come back Garry!” Gavin the Gazonapede said scuttling after his mate. “Quick,” Garry called as he weaved in and out of some green leafy weeds in the back garden. “The garden Olympics are starting soon, we have to hurry,” he said stopping momentarily to breathe.
“Ok, is Gabby already there?” Gavin said hurrying past Garry on his way to the magical wormhole. “Yes!” Garry replied catching up to Gavin sprinting. A while later Gavin and Garry had reached the outskirts of the magical wormhole. It was the type of transport all the bugs of Bugsville used to get from the first half of the city also called the front garden to the second half of the city the back garden.
Garry and Gavin walked into the hole and felt a swishing feeling of air as they were thrown out the other end of the wormhole. “Ahhh!” Garry said landing in a heap, his 10 legs poking out in all directions. “Come on, we don’t have all day Garry, we need to get to the grandstand today not tomorrow,” Gavin said walking past Garry.
After minutes of walking they reached the grandstand. It was loud there all you could hear was cheers of the other bugs supporting there favourite bugs. “Hi Gavin and Garry, come up here we have great seats overlooking the stage,” Gabby said taking them by the hand and leading them up the rose stem dodging sharp thorns. The walk up the rose stem was slow some French bugs up the top were lost, but soon they were on there way again.