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lostapiece
lostapiece
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Nov 4, 2008
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taxing the mind, another conundrum,
the same puzzle as before but its not humdrum.
battle lines drawn across the floor,
chequered squares in all sixty four.
 
battle opens infantry on the move,
forward ever forward ,so much to prove.
generals plan flank attacks and trap evasion,
deep in thought,weighing up the equation.
 
its the midst of battle,action is all around.
through imagined gunsmoke hear the cannon pound.
hussar leap soldiers grounded,
objective sited enemy king surrounded.
 
the end approaches through acrid stench,
defending artillery ,in vain entrench
in honour borne of battles yore,
defeated king bows head tward floor......
 
                                                                  david  g. wright

please comment good or bad but please dont steal it ....

fool4christ
fool4christ
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Nov 4, 2008
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#2

Pretty good, I have come across several poems on chess, maybe I should share them.

Ellbert
Ellbert
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Nov 4, 2008
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Thank you David for shareing your poem. Pen to Paper is not a easy task. I liked the tone and tempo of the poem.

EnoneBlue
EnoneBlue
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Nov 4, 2008
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#4

very nice

Rael
Rael
Nov 4, 2008
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Nice work man. I like that you staged it in more of the Napoleonic era with the rooks as cannons, and the inclusion of the "hussar" was a nice touch. I also like how the final image is the king falling, as if in slow motion, and hasn't yet hit the ground. Bravo, David.

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krazykat1111
krazykat1111
Nov 4, 2008
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#6

I think it is very good I think you should "Publish and be damned" lol  but then my friend I could be biased *soft smile*

ADK
ADK
Nov 4, 2008
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#7

I think it is a NICE poem!

ADK

Evil_Homer
Evil_Homer
Nov 5, 2008
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#8

Pretty good, mate.

thespicekitten
thespicekitten
Nov 5, 2008
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#9

scrap my note, just read it. bless, its lovely, lol

eddiewsox
eddiewsox
Nov 5, 2008
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#10

I like it, good job. 

QBaletfin
QBaletfin
Nov 7, 2008
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#11

Fantasy trio Pictures, Images and Photos

TO CHESS!

kal1111
kal1111
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Nov 7, 2008
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#12

WELL DONE! So descriptive. It creates an action picture of the battle. Keep it up, you have a gift!

Electraflier
Electraflier
Nov 8, 2008
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#13

David! Wow, I really liked the imagery. That is an almost perfect description of the game! I look forward too and expect more!

                                                        Michael