Your honest opinion.

I am trying to write a book. I already had a forum about it but it wouldn’t format correctly and the thread died in like 5 minutes. Here we go…

“Twenty years ago the world changed. The nights became darker, sickness became common, death ruled. Anger, hatred, and revenge. Those control man. The hearts of men have gone cold.”

175 years ago a peaceful island in the broken sea was taken by a cruel branch of a vast kingdom. They ruled their people with terror and fear. Until now none fought back. In that island a rebellion is growing. At the same time darkness grows stronger. Many of the characters will begin to fight for good but like many loose their path. As darkness descends man’s destiny and desires change. The leaders of men become corrupt and drunken with power. Those who fight for freedom from the cruel empire will find their path changing. Those men are.

The heir: he would be prince if his kingdom had not been taken. His father was killed by the ruling empire. He swears revenge.

The Assassin: he sees the cruelty of men and resists. He fights for the freedom of his people.

The Forster: he lived in secret until his brother left him to join the rebellion. In the rebellion he died. The forester promises to avenge him.

The traitor: hated by all including himself. He will never forgive himself for what he has done. He wishes he was stronger but gives in to the temptations of power.

The guardsman: he guards the ruler of another land. He will keep safe those he protects. But can he risk his people to do what is right?

Many are guided by temptation and revenge. If they will have to change or else they shall be of him (death).

So what do u guys think?

As I said I need your honest opinion.

I think it has potential

Thanks

Bump

That's really good you're really good at this

Thanks

Same as #6 it def has potential

Yaa

U could be a famous book writer id read it

Thanks you all! I hope that the book will turn out well.

I hope if I publish it I will get good reviews