To impress someone, a poem

Bacti
Bacti
Jul 6, 2008, 7:25 PM |
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Gazer 

I gaze up at the stars and hope

That you would come back

Or maybe it is impossible

To pick up all this slack. 

I wish and I hope

To hold your hand someday

I’ve been to shallow to you,

These games are just too hard to play. 

I’ll be there I swear,

When we cross hearts again

I’d wait centuries to see you,

I would never again have pain. 

When I roamed, I roamed alone

I was invaded right to the bone.

To see your eyes the world lights up,

And I will always stand up.

 

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