A New Poem

In case you have not noticed;I like quotes, and I like writing, so I tried to put two different things together, please tell me if you likey.

"Ligtning crashes, an old mother dies"

"I hear a thunder in the distance"

"Demons cluttering around/ My face showing no emotion"

"(And I said oh) So I held my head up high"

"Because V is for vampire, B is for blood"

"I was so scared I forgot(en?) my name"

"Which only fuels their selfish pride"

"I cry out to God/ Seeking only his decision"

"Your face/ to face/ with the man who sold the world"

"Ashes to dust"

"No time for mourning/ An't got no time..."

"Lightning crashes/ A new mother cries"

Please comment on this one, I would like to know if this is any good, or if you likey.

P.S. I like My Own Prison, in case it wasn't obvious.