I like it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
However, there is a cure/answer for the disease of life. Knowing this it made the poem that much stronger. I might post this poem under your name in some of my groups.
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ok man, id love that. i just wanna see what u think bout it.
oh and thanks. hope some others tell me what they think.
love it!!!!!!!!
That's deep,man!
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yea that was deep, great poam! it makes you think..
"in this war we call life everyone bleeds" that line really gets to me
so deep dude....what got you on this poem?
some experiences. lol, thanks.
hey, this is a poem i wrote a little while ago. please read it and give me some feedback.
TITLE : Everyone Bleeds
The wind it blows to reveal her golden face.
She walks the street like she knows her place
But she hasn't got a clue
Many decisions she will rue
she is stuck in a dream
if she saw reality shed have to scream.
things are never as they seem
your given fake credits you can't redeem
so much bueaty but so naive
she's like a child on christmas eve
her eyes they sparkle but her heart is broken
she gave her love but its a useless token
as we age they say we mature
but age is just a disease without a cure.
the world is full of so much love.
but all we do is kill to say we are above
we all walk the streets with so many needs
In this war of life everyone bleeds
so much to love and yet we dont
we could stop all the oppression but we know we won't
the woman is crying she cannot cope
an innocent man hangs by a rope
her tears are falling her love is gone
but the world looks away and just moves on
we all walk the streets with so man needs
in this war we call life everyone bleeds.
so how is it? please post.