poem 3

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Peeking Stars

The sky shimmering gold
The stars taking a peek
You look at me ,
I just forgot how to speak

I sit there beside you,
A cherished moment coming true
I don’t know what you think about me
But all I care is whether you love me

You continue to sit without saying a thing
I start to wonder what’s happening
Are you going away or just coming closer?
Dreadful thoughts began to come over

Or maybe you just want to talk about her
When it comes to sadness ,you are my cure
But did you know ? I began to fear
my eyes begin to fill up with tears

Am I just a friend ?
Are my dreams dying again?
I start to cry, but I don’t why
I knew it wasn’t even worth a try

I look at you, and you do too,
The truth just becoming true
You look at me with the most tender eyes
And I melted ,twice

I just continue to fall into your face
Your hands caressing my cheek, with grace
You came closer ,
Your hand around my waist

Soft lips touching mine
And I responded to that touch, which was just divine
I rested my head below his
Can everything be more perfect than this?

The majestic sky glimmering,
The starts are at their peak
You look at me ,
And I just forgot how to speak

-Phavi Kannan (me)

wow, it reminds me of lyrics to a song. that was amazing. :)

immediate response , thanks :)

Great Poem!

thanks :)

thats cool so wat r u doing?

middle school duh

wow you're great at poetry, keep it up cupcake :)

you know theres going to be a meteor shower tonight? i just thought it matches the poem lol

I had the same thought about meteor showers

*puts on a puppy face , coincidence maybe?

another hot topic poem, brought to u by phavi, lol

haha. it's possible

lol

That's absolute sh*te.

I'm sorry that u don't like the poem

The only sh*tty thing here, Beast, is the idea that you'd be so callous to a 13-year old girl who is just trying her hand with art.

Sheesh. I'll love to critique your poetry.

Cupcake, take from his comment that there will always be rude people when you put yourself out there. Don't take his completely un-called for comment to heart - it's indicative of a deep dissatisfaction Beast faces in his own life and has nothing to do with your artistic endeavours.

thank u Rael :)

Rael is always there for people when you need somebody.

he is :)

I wouldn't have been so calm if he hadn't beaten me to it.