poem 3

btw poem 2 sucked so i deleted it.

Be free

our eyes they sparkled

u were mine

so much fun

boy did you make me shine

but the clouds they came

and blocked out the sun

we wore torn apart

i realized what happend but i couldnt run

i got up,

and saw u fall

i cased after u

but i hit a wall

two souls

one love

u flew away

just like a dove

i wanted u back

but my prayers were not heard

i longed for her

but she moved on without a word

a love so strong

i was unreal

i was crushed

by this horrid ordeal

i was blind

but now i can see

my caged bird was longing

for she wasn't all she could be

my friend was missing

she wouldn't sing

she made me feel

just like a king

but her future is bright

who knows what it will bring

she is gone,

but still in my heart

so now i must begin

right from the start.

i see my bird

as she flies by

i know its better

but i want to cry

her future is bright

what will it bring?

i miss her still

but i will sing

is it right?

we will see

fly my bird

for you are free

by mike.

wow for a marine corp wanna be, you are a love poem king

i'm connecting this to brainblaster you seem to write when she does,...

please comment, btw.

whoa grim, thats deep... i like it! keep on writing!

thanx

Nice poem, liked the first one better.

yea, so did i, not all turn out really good though. the first one was memorable and not too long.

but thanks for the feedback.

Could I see your second, when I first looked (just now) it was deleted. Good poem this one though, cant wait to see number 1!

hey now im in the hot topics!!! oops, sorry.

good bro....

thankyou. u know if u totally hate it, say so, id liketo fix any problems.

ok then it sucked jk that was AWESOME! deep and meaningful the way they should be