This story shows promising character development.
DONT READ! Well you can if you dare! Short Story!
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Mar 11, 2019
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On day there was us we all died...the END ☠️☠️
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I personally liked chapter 1 better. your way of writing is very clear and my favourite part was when you described how the bee named Bob likes flowers ^_^
chapter 2 was pretty confusing though and a little bit too long to read. you can work on that.
after all it was a nice story and you are talented so keep writing! I can't wait for your next book ^_^
chapter 2 was pretty confusing though and a little bit too long to read. you can work on that.
after all it was a nice story and you are talented so keep writing! I can't wait for your next book ^_^
actually I think the bee having 400 legs will be a big problem to all the readers so my advice is to sell your story as Sci-Fi book. otherwise I am afraid you will have to rewrite whole chapter 2 again....
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awesome story.can i use this in my movies. 😀🙏😲